Take One: Comments and Criticisms

      I'm happy with how our first draft came out. Charlie and I had both performed the first scene in our three part sequence before, but this time we had to adjust our characters. The Nurse had to be played as if she were teasing Juliet instead of as if she was a little slow. I have to work more on making this a little more obvious. I ask Juliet if she had eaten yet after I've trailed off when describing Romeo. Charlie did a good job of making Juliet look as if she was in her own little world imagining him, but when I switch from describing him to asking her if she had eaten, I think making the transition more obvious would help to further demonstrate their relationship. It would show that though the Nurse is teasing her, she loves Juliet. Juliet's reactions to the teasing was good because it made her look childish, which is the goal of that scene.

     The next two scenes were new to us, but I feel like we got the timing right. The second scene is when we first see Juliet stand up for herself. When Charlie started yelling and defending Romeo, she stepped up and I stepped back. I think this change will be even more obvious when we learn our lines. Once we're off-book, we'll be able to focus on our movements and the little gestures that could further demonstrate Juliet's change and how she grew further from the Nurse, like when Juliet turns away from my touch in the second scene. These little gestures were rushed because I would be too busy reading and then before I knew it, it was time for that to happen and I was several steps away from her. Overall, I think it was a good first draft, that with memorization, could form a solid base for our analysis.